I was half right. I'm not really sure what to do with this. It's technically the fourth Mouse and Mutt piece I guess, but the tone is absolutely 900% different, and I'm fairly certain it's entirely incomprehensible. It also takes 8 pages for me to actually write anything story related. That said, I think if anyone is going to read this horrible #%*!, they may as well read all of it, including the ridiculous drivel that led to me actually getting something sort-of-kind-of done.
Be warned. This contains some pretty graphic language and imagery. NSFW, or for kids. 18+. You get it.
Here it is. I swear I'm not schizophrenic.
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These are words on a page.
Words that presently mean nothing in particular. Words that
represent frustration, on my behalf, with my seeming inability to create
something spectacular and deep and moving or at least mildly or even perhaps
possibly intensely arousing because why nto and this particular train of
thought is going chooo mother fucking CHOOOOOOOOOOOO and I made a typo on choo
but I fixed it.
I need to stop fixing typos, like nto up above. ‘nto’, that
is, with quotations, because I’m referring to something that I just typed. This
is supposed to be stream of thought. Why would I fix stream of thought? I
just—fuck I just did it again. I REMOVED AN IE FROM FIX. AN E. THAT ONE. NOT
THE I BUT THE E> I BEFORE E WEXCEPT AFTER C.
The amazing part is that ai tyupe at a corrected 99wpm
somehow, which means I generally erase thes e typos with such INCREDIBLE HASTE
that my brain vomits on paper at over a hundred words perm minute even
correcting for the fact that my fingers fare fudging fudgy little fuckers that
continbueally fuck things up if I don’t police their every goddamn move I
didn’t even type an apostrophy aopostrophy APOSTROPHE FUCKING HELL in either of
those don’t/didn’t conjunction junction whats your function windows words is
grammar flungion
Dungeon
These are words on a page.
What needs to happnn, obviously, is INTENSE INSPIRATIOn
Inspiration that will both guide my hands and fi x my fyping
typos because GOOD GODDAMN am I a lsoppy
typer when I’m not trying REALLY HARD to be accurate, or even when I kind of
am, and that’s why jesus invented the backspace button back in 2123 B.C. and
eventually brought the technology to earth to share with us writerly typs
I AM FUCKING JESUS’ GENEROSITY RIGHT NOW
RIGHT IN THE EYE SOCKET
Hold on I
need to remove this double spacing bullshit.
OK.
NOW I CAN
SINGLE SPACE. FUCK YAH.
I don’t know
how much better this is but oviously it’s more true to nhow many types TYPES
WHY
TIMES
MOTHERFUCKER
TIMES
TIMES I HIT
ENTER
Why would I
type types
Is this some
kind of FERRRRr
R
FREUDIAN
SLIP
Does type
mean something
Lik
LK
LIKE
LIKE FUCKING
LIKE LIKE
FUCKING
GOD
Does TYPE
Mean
COK?!
With an
extra c
I want to
know who decided that cock needed another c
Was it not
cocky enough without the c?
Was it just
like
Too
Beverage?
beverage
STOP
FUCKN
FIXING THAT
WORD
BEVERAGE-Y
WITHOUT THE
HYPHEn
FUCKING WORD
This is my
stream of consciousness goddfucking damnit and you’re ubusy blowing it RIGHT
OFF THE TRACKS with you r pretentious good grammar and spelling bullshit why
would you do that
hm
dsglkh
STOP AUTOCAP
thats a
start
hold on
STOP
AUTOCORRECT THATS
BOOYA
what about
dont
hrrrr
I have to
change these one by one unless I want to change my overall settings and have to
fix thema gain later
WE WILL LIVE
WITH DOESN’T
BEING FIXED
DESPITE THAT
NOT BEING A FIX IN THIS CASE
does not
becomes
doesnnnnnttttt
the apostrophe
is a visual aid
it allows
the viewer who is too fucking retarded to know that these are two words that
habe
have
have
have become
one word
I mean
Hebrew doesn’t even ask for fucking VOWELS and English has to let us know the
difference between DO NOT and DONT is that it’s pronounced DONE-T and … no
that’s still dun, it’s pronounced DOHNT and I guess the apostrophe lets us know
that DON IS A LONG VOWEL?
wouldn’t
that make it DOHSNT
who the fuck
on gladgshladgshkladgslhk
who the fuck
EVEN knows
where did an
o come from
this is
three pages
three pages
in ten minutes
is there a
purpose here? who would read this? I AM GOING TO PUT THIS ON MY BLOG THAT
NOBODY READS BECAUSE NOBODY READS IT ANYWAY SO WHY THE FUCK NOT
then I’ll
call attention to all my friends and go HEY LOOK HOW FUNNY MY ALMOST FOUR AM
FRUSTRATION IS YOU SHOULD READ THIS
and they’ll
go ooooo I REMOVD AN O
they’ll go
LOL OK
and then
get to this
part
and see that
this was all thought of at this point of my stream of consciousness
and go
well that
was a cheap thing to do
you aren’t
witty at all
and ill say
FUCK YOU
MY STREAM
ISNT PRODUCINGA NYHING USING
there should
be like
WEREWOLVES
or VAMPIRES
or something
ORIGINAL
all up in
this bitch
by the rules
of stream of sconsiousness for pretentious dickhats this should have turned
into something deep and gratifiyingsdlkh and amaingamazingamazing type that one
hunrdgsgdssg hundred times on the chalkboard timmy UNTIL YOU GET IT RIGHT
DEEP
and
GRATIFYING
and
AMAZING
about I
don’t know
mouse
mutt
NOT having
sex for some reason
I don’t know
what their problem is
he has the
dik—aahhh
she has the
pssaahhh
rammstein is
SO DESPARATE WHY WOULD THEY MAKE THAT SONG
much less
the music video
I mean
really
how lonely
do you have to be to write a song about slot a in slot b that doesn’t even
sound remotely cool in GERMAN
everything
sounds cooler in german
maybe it’s
the german words for genitals
they aren’t
recogniazable and kind of funny at the same time
its not lie
like like LIKELIELLIEKLIEK LIKE the Spanish words for so many things
si so I
think the underlying issue is that even if they took their time
theres no
german word DICKEN
or PUSSEN
PUSSEIGCH
so hat THAT
whole LETS
DO IT QUICK thing is just extra icing on the really shitty cake
why am I
still talkin about rammstein theyre so yesterday like oh em gee
MOUSE
WHY ARENT
YOU INTO MUTT
mouse says:
we’re just like omg friendsalso
he saved my
life in a very dramatic scene you haven’t written yet
but you want
to tell yourself you will
someday
when you
finish that book
that one of
THREE books you’ve started and will probably not actually ever finish
I mean lets
be honest
me being you
a part of
your head
the part
that right now represents DOUBT and DISGSUT and a complete reprehension for the
ability to type the depressing words in question
you really
don’t write much
and this
isn’t working out that well
but I guess
if I want to be a nice part of your brain and answer WHY DID I JUST
jlalishkllkj;lk;j
p
skjs
I just
ranted about
correcting a nd into and
and in the
process
FIXED
ANOTHER WORD
THIS IS SUCH
A HABIT
IT’S A GOOD
HABIT
WHY AM I
WORYING ABOUT IT
ok
ok
moving on
I jjst
mashed my keyboard whayayy too hard for that lksdglkhasdg thing
more like
lhgdsklgskhllhkhklklklklhklkh
anyway
MOUSE SAYS
I WONT FUCK
MUTT BECAUSE
really im
too clingy and I know it
ill see him
again dnad aginasglkh again, thats the word im trying to type, again
and
ill get
attached if I am also fucking him
attached in
a way thats not
you know
MY BFF
because he
already is
but in that
whole
I WANT YOUR
IMAGINARY UNPRODUCABLE BABIES kin d of way
and I don’t
want that
why are you
trying to get me to fuck mutt anyway
is it for
your own very private gratification
that I want
no part of
being that
part of your brain that odoesnt like when youre gratified
yes, thats
probably it
youre a bad
man
WHATSTHIS
you wrote us
to be eventual partners you say
welt hats
just anasdglkhad dandy
maybe you
should have thought about that before you wrote me as mildly psychotic and
having PTSD and having only one legitimately good friend in the world that I
know would actually literally die for me in any kind of situation that even
remotely called for that kind of heroic bullshit
I wont risk
o
oo
it
it
that word
I wont risk
it
its
not
worth
it
or is it?
he knows me
so well
better than
anyone
anyone ever
he knows
every part of who I am
every fiber
of my being
he knows
what
i
am
and yet
I have that
fear
and maybe
thats it
maybe thast
the hook
maybe
this
is
whatlsktj
what
I should eb
writing
Mouse’s eyes
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k
I just
stopped writing
I stopped ot
think
thats not
how this works
this is
MINDSHIT
BRAIN VOMIT
lets try
again
mouse’s eyes
were just so FUCKING GODDAMN full of those watery tear things
she couldn’t
fucking see
beause she
was so much crying the tears
she didn’t
understand why
not really
so she’d
dated a douchebag, that wasn’t a first
she’d dated
douchebags before, right? so why was this one so important. why was this man so
important to her life? Why was this such a big motherfucking deal? Why did she
care?
The answer
was probably something she didn’t want to think about, but would anyway, and
would lie there for hours in bed, sleepless, red-eyed, miserable as fuck
because she’s a fucking miserable person and it’s all my fault for writing her
that way. I wrote her miserable. but that said, she’s entertaining that way.
And she’s thinking about why this asshole was such a big deal. This asshole
who’s name I forget. Hold on. I’m gonna look that up. How else is she going to
rant about her boyfriend with the Japanese suffix that means SHE and that was
an accident but it works so well. HOLD ON.
Maeko. What
a fuck. What a goddamned fuck. That’s what she’s thinking. That’s what’s
spinning in her head, just spinning, spinning and fucking spinning like her head
is one of those circly things kids spin on and that’s sitting in the middle, as
she whirs around it, and she gets off and it’s still spinning in her head and
she can’t get away and she’s tipsy and sick and miserable and she wants to fucking VOMIT and she can’t get it out,
can’t get him out, can’t claw his miserable grimey disgusting little fucking
hands out of her head for the life of her
the way they
touched her
outside and
in
ALL over her
all inside of her
The way he
whispered to her ear, those fucking little disgusting whispers, the whispers
she loved so much, croning and cooing and whispering whispering whispering so
sensually so sweetly so LOVINGLY so fucking
lovingly about how much he fucking adored her
How much she
was everything. How his world centered around her. How he’d waited all his
life. How he didn’t care if she was apsychotic bitch and had os many problems
and all this trauma she would never, ever, ever, ever EVER FUCKING GET OVER>
WHY.
Why her? Why
can’t she, couldn’t she, wouldn’t she, ever get her shit straightened out, ever
forget, ever give it up, ever let go, ever trust, ever calm down, ever be the
sweet innocent loving lustful nasty lovable little shit she was before her
boyfriend got MONSTERFIED by that fucking THING and tried to kill her with a
letter opening THING in the middle of fucking her and started talking about the
godbeast and how he was part of the whole and how she needed to join him in
eternity.
the life
behind his eyes, the sorrow, the tears in his eyes as this thing talked through
him, refused him, raped his mind and forced his body to be something else, to
say something else, to try to kill the one person he loved, her, and forced her
to take his life in defense
and then maeko
maeko said
I understand
he said he
understood
and he
wouldn’t push, and he wouldn’t ask, and he wouldn’t investigate, and he loved
her anyway, and he could wait, and he would wait, and everything would be okay
And for the
first time in so long. So long. So incredibly fucking long. She started to
believe it. she trusted that man. Trusted him. Trust. It’s such a simple thing.
The ability to take the things someone says at face value, to accept them as
what they are, to take the basic dictionary fucking definition of what a person
fucking says and accept that as the actual intention of the sentence provided
with no alternative motivations and no falseness behind it, no fakery, no
forged emotions and manipulative bullshit.
T R U S T.
And she
finally began to give it and then WHAT.
FUCKING
WHAT.
THAT MOTHER
FUCKING
PIECE OF
FUCKING SHIT
HOW COULD HE
FUCKING
GODDDALGLHK
GODDDALGLHK
all over
her.
all
over
her
those
fucking
hands
she could
still feel his fingers. long and sleek, beautiful like his face, beautiful like
his skin, like his hair.
Beautiful
like the promises he whispered so lovingly. Whispers. Always whispers. That
gentle tone. That implied care. The love you could hear, and feel, and taste,
and touch, and smell.
The love
that wasn’t. The love that was false, faked, forgery. Hollywood fucking
Oscar-nominated acting. The love that was there strictly to allow him as much
sex as he wanted. The love that would get her to swallow. The love that would
let him put his fingers where she didn’t want them. The love that would—
She felt
sick. her hands grapsed the nearest trash bin, quivering, her face flushing as
she wretched nothingness over its rank, disgusting maw. She glanced around,
lost, lost for words and thoughts of anything but him.
She was
still on the ship. Still inside. Still near him. His blood was still on her
fist. His broken face. That pretty, pretty face, with a big swollen bloody knob
on the front of it.
Beautiful.
She needed
to leave.
Her feet
were carrying her, pad pad, tap tap, slap slap, the sound of angry bare feet
against artificially textured floor, floor that lit and shone and cost way too
fucking goddamn much. Floor that tracked. Floor that would know she left.
She could
smell it up ahead. The smell of oil, of sweat, of work. The smell of the
garage, and the mechanics it held. The smell of her bike. Her beautiful,
loving, always-faithful bike. Her bike that would carry her far away from here.
her
footsteps changed. She was on concerete now, in the garage, listening to the
clang and wham and BANG BANG! BANG!!! of the mechanics and their tools. She shoved
her hand in her pocket. Keys. When had she gotten them? Must have been when she
dropped off her shit. Her secret super soldier spy movie bullshit. Living
armor. It made her skin crawl. She loved the strength it gave her. It made her
feel invisible, against everything, against everyone. Except this. This had
ruined it. Ruined her.
She had
trusted him.
She gripped
the bike. Climbed on. Ran a palm across the sleak, polished metal, the quietly
humming engine on the back, with all the power she could possibly want, power
enough to juice the future space bullshit hover thrusters on the bottom of her
beloved chrome beauty. She didn’t remember placing the key in it. She didn’t
remember starting it. But it was humming. Her hands were on the grips.
She
squeazed. It began to rise. Rise, rise, until two feet of air separated her
from the floor below. She urged it forward, slowly, slowly, lovingly, tenderly,
like the careful, guided flesh of a lover into—
CHRIST
those fucking
those fucking
ucking
goddamn
hands
She couldn’t
do this anymore. Couldn’t’ be here. Couldn’t think. Couldn’t smell, couldn’t
listen, couldn’t see, without seeing his fucking face, the face she just put
her fist into, the face she just ruined.
The bike
shot forward. The garage door hissed open, and suddenly, she was flying over
open terrain. Flying toward the city. The city of locals, civilized locals, the
locals they were protecting from the guerilla warriors from the neighboring
nation. The locals that were brutally raped and stabbed and murdered just
because they lived here, instead of there. The locals she didn;’t really give a
shit about. The locals that gave her a moral justification to take a blade and
drive it through the beating heart of a live, sentient person, to twist, and to
smile as blood poured free from his chest.
The locals
that let her sleep at night.
The city
wasn’t far. The air was cool and crisp and beautiful and clean. Like home. So
much like home.
It smelled
like dirt. It smelled wonderful. The trees blurred into a green mush as she
flew bye, a scarcely textured blur, smidges of brown at the base and endlessly
shifting edges. A wave of green and brown, rising and falling. An ocean.
She missed
the ocean. She hated the ocean. Why did she hate the ocean? Why did she miss
it? She hated it a lot more than she missed it, which made missing it a mystery.
Sand in her shorts, sand in her hair, sand in her shoes, sand in her goddamn
cunt for that matter, sand fucking everywhere, she hated sand, hated hated sand
and the beach and maeko and his body and his body on the beach in hers and sand
sand
sand
sand
sand
she
She was in
the city. She was in the city now. Her bike hissed as it slowed, automatically,
its advanced scifi bullshit sensors detecting dense life and concrete forestry
up ahead and realizing, so smartly, that the open-spaces speed, that wonderful
speedy blur, would get her killed in a concrete jungle.
She was
gliding now, a patient pace, gliding through the streets and between cars and
just barely faster than the traffic laws said she should, but if she got
stopped it wouldn’t matter because she was military, so fuck it.
Where was
the bar? She hovered, so patiently, so barely outside of the laws of this
place, so close to respectful it almost seemed she gave a shit. She didn’t. So incredibly far from giving a shit. But,
the bar. The bar would take longer if she had to excuse her speed before
showing her credentials and effectively threatening an officer without a word
and telling him by extention, wordlessly, breathlessly, that she did not
respect him or his laws or his world or his people and she was here because
this was where she was allowed to kill bad people without recourse.
The bar.
She found
the bar, the glowing signs, the smell of smoke and death and cancer and whores,
just outside, always the whores. SO many whores in this place. She would never
understand it. They were legal. Most things were legal, if they were done
right, in this place. Done correctly. Done within regulation. But so many
whores. They must have gotten paid well. Was that something she should
consider? Sex for money? She would never see the fuckers again, never build an
attraction, and never be poor.
She would
hate herself for every second of it. She hated herself now, even, for
considering it. Hated. Loathed. A useless spiteful little monster, incapable of
love or trust, throwing her body and heart away on a monster just because he
was fucking pretty. Because her groin said, wow, this man is so attractive, you
should believe what he says. Because her heart said, it’s about time, maybe you
can trust this man, his words, his sweet sweet tone.
Mutt said he
was a creep. Mutt tried to tell her. Mutt always knew, and she always argued,
and she fucking did it anyway and he
was always right. And he never rubbed it in. Even today. That was nothing. He
was right. Always right. A little nudge like that, it was a gentle reminder.
Listen to Mutt. Care about what mutt things, not because Mutt thinks it but
because it will protect you, it will save you, and Mutt loves you and doesn’t
want to see you hurt and you don’t want to disappoint him yet again.
Loves? Loves. That word. That word
again. Love. Love meant care. Love meant pure intentions, right? Love meant
trust.
She trusted
Mutt. This much she realized. Why was it so different? Why couldn’t she just
tell him? Why didn’t she want him, even as she pined for him? Why did she push
him away, even as she drew him in, held him, cried in his arms? Why didn’t she
just let it happen? Why hadn’t he pushed to make it happen?
Mutt knew.
Why didn’t mutt try, then? Surely she would listen to him, if he was hers. If
he’d made that happen.
Made? Did he
have that power?
He did. Mutt
could push her buttons, lead her on, break her defenses, twist her heart,
wiggle past her carefully elected walls and straight between her ribs. Straight
between her legs.
Mutt could
make that happen. Because she trusted him. She trusted him and that made her
vulnerable and Mutt could hurt her or use her any way she wanted and she would
be too stupid to see it until it was too late.
But he
wouldn’t. She couldn’t evne hold the thought. Mutt would never do that to her,
at all, ever, ever in a million years. Mutt saved her life. Mutt was everything.
Mutt was her best friend, her only true ally, the only one she could tell
everything to and yet rarely did. The only person she pushed away, the only
person she blocked out, the only good man in her life and she wanted nothing to
do with him that way because he was
so firmly, comfortably, blissfully locked within that safe little friend zone.
If he left, if he hurt her, if she
hurt him, which god forbid was so
much more likely
Well
She would
shoot herself.
The bar door
pushed open. She sat, slowly, in a bar stool, because it was a fucking bar, and
every bar had to have impractical seats that didn’t support her back for no
apparent reason. Why were bar stools invented? Was there a purpose? She didn’t
care. She slumped forward, arms against the edge of the counter, and demanded
the most expensive thing on the menu. The most expensive thing turned out to be
a lot of expensive, but a single sip assured her of one thing. She would be
drunk as fuck in about ten minutes. Her epically low tolerance combined with
the sheer BOOZLESNESS of this drink would have her plastered, senseless, nigh
helpless, if not for the fact that she carried a huge fucking knife between her
tits and it was enough to scare away anyone with a lick of sense, if she needed
it.
And then she
saw him. Sitting there, brooding, becoming drunker by the millisecond, she saw
him. The last man she trusted, before Maeko. The one who had to leave. The one
who moved away. Moved away from her, broke her heart, and pursued his dreams
far far away. How many had she trusted? What was she, some serial
heartbreakist? No, no not really. She’d trusted this man, and he left. Two
years later, she trusted Maeko, and he cheated on her with some fucking slut
bag and she left him. This one, this one left on terms he considered good.
Reasonable.
He was a
soldier, goddamnit, and he’d been offered a promotion. Who was she to tell him
not to? She never even asked him not to. She told him, go for it. Do what you
need to. Don’t stay back for her.
Not an ounce
of her being had meant it. Some thin shred of decency, of respect, told her she
was supposed to say that. She asked Mutt, and he told her she needed to, even
if she didn’t feel it. Because if she held him back, he’d resent her, and he’d
leave her for realsies and it wouldn’t be on terms he considered good.
He’d hate
her for it.
she couldn’t
stand the thought. couldn’t stand being hated by this amazing gentle man s he
trusted and loved and wanted to keep forever. She let him go, instead. And she
regretted it every day. But she knew Mutt was right. The lesser of two regrets.
The smaller problem.
The man saw
her back. Simple name. Taron. Taron, for some reason, Tae-rawn, emphasis on the
first syllable, second short. It was a weird name. Almost Sharon. But short.
Simple. Taron was looking at her.
her heart
stopped. her face flushed, her eyes peeled away, her drink found her lips. She
swallowed. Swallowed again. Felt her body sway, felt her temperature rise, felt
her bladder remind her that alcohol would make her have to pee every twenty
minutes for no fucking reason and
that she was perfectly within her rights to ignore that urge because she had
peed just a few hours ago, goddamnit, and hadn’t had nearly enough to drink to
justify this.
The man was
approaching her. His lips moved. She heard adoration. Warmth. Happiness. “By
the Graces,” he exalted. His arms wrapped around her.
her body
shrank back, then caved. Her shoulders began to shake. Her eyes teared up, and
she buried them in his shoulder, as if that would stop him from noticing.
Everything
poured
out
She was in a
room. An unfamiliar room. The last two hours had been a blur. She was hardly
coherent. Where was she now? Was this a hotel?
it was a
hotel. Was she here to fuck him? To hold him? To confess how much she needed
him, how much she needed someone who wasn’t Mutt, wasn’t quite that safe, but
was trusted and loved and how the fuck could he have left her like that? For a
job? A salary? A raise? What was she, an object to weigh, a minor facet of his
life? Some thing he could balance
against his pay check and realize that she was worth less than paid vacation and
the freedom to eat out every single day?
Was that so important?
He was
talking to her again. Sweetly. Her anger melted, melted away, into her eyes and
out onto her cheeks, a river of regret and hate and sullen evenings filled with
drugs and loathing. A pool of pain, washed free from her soul, and onto his
chest.
Her lips
crashed into his. He blinked, pushing back. “Whoa”,
she heard him whisper. He said something about watching her for the night.
She heard words like ‘don’t look good’ and ‘worried’ and ‘you’, and they made a
picture in her head, a painting, beautiful and desirable and oh so tangible, a
painting she could fall into, and live in, if just for the moment, of his broad
arms, his warm smile, his healing touch, wrapped around her soul like a father’s
soothing embrace, like a lover and a mentor all in one, perhaps even a god. A
mystical being, holding her heart in its palm, capable of doing anything and
everything it wanted with the poor, shriveled thing, caked in tar and spite.
She was
clawing at his shirt. She heard his breath pick up. She smelled that familiar
smell, that stench of lust, of bodies destined to clash and grind and squirm
and writhe, as if in agony, horrible
inescapable, loveable, salacious, delicious, delectable agony, agony she craved
and needed and yearned for. Agony she deserved. Agony she couldn’t live
without. Not now. Not with him.
She heard
his voice again. She didn’t care what it was saying. His pants fell, and his
voice shifted. A gasp. Surprise. Her face was lower, lower still, between his
thighs, his flesh between her lips, and still his voice. Shock. Protest. Love.
Desire.
Agony, at
its finest.
His fist was
in her hair. His fist was clenching down, and it was speaking to her, and it
was telling her what he wanted and what he needed, and it was telling her that
the words out of his mouth weren’t true, and what he wanted was this, and this
was what he would have. This was what he needed. He needed her pain, just as
much as she did.
Writhing, like a worm, like a wounded animal trapped in the grip of another. Her coverings disappeared, her lips against his, against his chest, against his stomach, around his cock. His grip tightened, pulled, shifted, demanded. She was on a surface, a hard surface, a table or counter or ledge, stable, stable, holding her, never letting her fall. She was on something firm and unmovable, and he was inside of her, moving, craving, needing.
His body
enveloped hers. Held hers, entirely, wholly, wrapping her meager scrawny
disgusting little frame in safety and hope and love and shelter and everything
she ever needed. He was moving inside of her, and he needed her, and she needed
him, and she was writhing
writhing
squirming
hot air
between her lips, like a cloud, a hot cloud, suffocating and holding her breath
for ransom, pulling the very life out of her lungs, squeezing it, letting her
grasp it just briefly between tiny gasps and moans. enough air to move, enough
air to feel
never enough
to think, to do anything to react, to stop, to wonder
just enough
to writhe
she felt
something hot, so hot and warm, an offering, a manifestation, need incarnate,
so deep inside of her. her lips on her ear were whispering, telling her what
happened, even as the words were lost. the story was sacred, whispered on the
tones of whispers, a story composed of air and breath and the dissipation of
that cloud, the return of her life to her lungs and his to his own, the
quenching of need, the end of agony
a twitch
a quiver
legs that
couldn’t feel
the agony
had stopped, replaced by something deep and powerful and oh so real, so real, so real she could smell
it and taste it on her lips, so real she could feel it inside of her, no longer
moving, no longer needing
just there, sated, loving, holding, making it
all go away
it was going
so far away
she was
flying, now, through the air, so high, so deep in his embrace
she was on
another surface, so much warmer, so much softer
love
incarnate, above and below
his body
enveloped hers
his breath
found her ear
and the
world
began
to
fade
Once you get the loony rambling out of the way, you've got a nice piece of writing going here.
ReplyDeleteIt feels less stream-of-consciousness once you get into storytelling mode, but it keeps a delightfully unhinged feel all the way to the end. Unsettling in a good way.
If mashing your keyboard like that keeps delivering interesting results like this, by all means keep it up.
Thanks <3
ReplyDeleteYou know, believe it or not, the only thing I changed once I got into the story bit was I started loosely correcting typos. I did the math and the whole thing was barfed out at around 55wpm, which is a little over half of my transcription speed.
I'm not saying that to brag, mind. It's more that, I managed to do frightfully little cognition during this whole process, from start to finish. That false start before I rambled about thinking about it is the only time that happened, and from there, I was off to the races.
I don't know if I could replicate this. The eight pages of rambling nonsense preceding any real progress is a lot of pent up frustration, and I feel like that bled into the progress itself. I do want to try this again, some time when I don't feel like I'm forcing myself to write so much as seeing what my brain can vomit without pressure.
We'll see. Thanks for reading my brainpuke. I know puke of any kind isn't the most pleasant thing to focus on for sixteen pages.